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 | Love Me  [E] Something short and sweet on how to love me  |
| (4.5)  Greetings, Elexis LaFay! I discovered this piece on the Newbies Work List. I also noticed you are very new to WDC! Welcome! I hope you are enjoying the site! If you have any questions, please feel free to ask.  First of all, my reviews are intended to be helpful and encouraging, not hurtful in any way. Use what you feel works for you, and leave the rest.What I Liked  Great rhythm throughout this piece. I like how you tell it like it is. No beating around the bush!  You know what you want and that's good! You don't want to waste your time on someone who isn't going to be there for you. This is almost got a lyrical feel to it, which I like. My favorite line: Don't make love to me then up and disappear. Good job!Suggestions to Consider Stanza 2, Line 1: through out  throughout one word in this instance Your punctuation looks great, along with your spelling. Thumbs up!  Final Thoughts Your title summary says it all: Something short and sweet on how to love me. You've got it exactly right! Great flow, too. Have a great day and... K e e p on W r i t i n g ! Cubby ")
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