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*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines. I am reviewing this poem for the Angel Army Newbie Challenge SEP 2020.

*Reading* THE POEM

What does your mind hide from you? Does it do so to protect you?

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

I liked the word play in the poem.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is free form poem. There were no rhymes.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "against tramas of the dark."

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

I'm torn about suggesting a light edit for punctuation, as there is some punctuation, which for me, helps the flow of the poem in my mind. I really liked the expression and the exploration of tramas in the dark.

Reviewed by StephB for the the Angel Army

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