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 | A Centipede went to K-mart  [E] Poem about a centipede buying shoes. Winning entry Writing 4 kids Contest Jan 22.  |
| (4.5)  Greetings, lezismore-moreislez , I am reviewing this today as a judge for the "Writing 4 Kids" . This is one of fourteen entries in the January round! Thank you for participating! First of all, my reviews are intended to be helpful and encouraging, not hurtful in any way. Use what you feel works for you, and leave the rest. Visually appealing Easy to understand Followed the prompt & rules First Impression: How creative! And an illustrator's playground! So many pairs of shoes in every color and style.  Great rhythm and flow, too, along with the rhymes. Technicalities: No typos, great punctuation, all good! Favorites:A centipede went to Kmart, For one thousand pairs of shoes. A great way to begin this piece. My interest was piqued right away.   Final thoughts: I really enjoyed this. Just a thought, but you might consider adding more stanzas and trying to publish it as a picture book. The illustrations would be colorful and fun! Of course, you might have to change K-mart to something made-up, like Foot Mart or whatever.  Great job! Best of luck in the contest. Have a great day and...  K e e p on W r i t i n g ! Cubby ")
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