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 The Sound of Ice Open in new Window. [E]
A poem inspired by the writing style of Bill Watterson of Calvin and Hobbs fame
by Simon Dunsil Author Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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[center}*Star**BalloonB*Welcome to WDC Simon! I am here with a review to celebrate you! *Delight*


*Laugh* I found this item on the newsfeed and had a great laugh. Your expression was so clearly written that I could vision the whole thing. You did a great job showing your feeling about the incident too so I could relate.*Rolling*

*Bursty* The form had different line and verse lengths like free verse and the rhyme rocked. I think the style suit the theme and emotional content perfectly. Ice does that... slips all over with no regard for the dignity of form or person. *Bigsmile**Wink*

*Thumbsupgreen* Your word choices were effective and using all caps or quotes around words added emphasis and attention. Noting the desire for global warning adds to the comical given the way you feel about ice.
I am still laughing as I write this. Strikes my funny bone.

*Partyhatb* The questions in the first line hooked me in. Like who does care about it!*Crazy*

*Quill*One glitch I notice was the word "firmly" twice in line one, verse 5. I think one will do. *Wink*
And I wondered if the fourth last line would flow a bit better if you dropped the word "time". I found it read a bit long and took away from the power of the words following. It slowed it down for me. Just a minor thing that struck me.

*Starstruck*Thanks for sharing this comical and engaging expression. You nailed the event. It likely happens very often so makes for a relevant tale. or Tail bone tale! *Laugh* Made my night!

Keep on Writing!*Smile*

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