Hi, Starling , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I'm reviewing "Invalid Item"  because I discovered it on the "I Write: Enter the Second Decade"  forum page behind my entry.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph, of this chapter, hooked me and aroused my curiosity about the rest of the story. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The interaction and conversation between Law and Samuel build the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like both Samuel and Law because they are both sympathetic and intriguing characters.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this chapter because the climax suggested a happy ending.








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