Greetings Penelope Moonbeam ,  Welcome to Writing.com! I was pleased to read  "Invalid Item"  from your portfolio and it is my pleasure to give your writing a review.

   This review too is being offered as part of the first WDC Superpower Reviewers Portfolio Raid Review of 2023!    

January 7, 2023

  FIRST IMPRESSION
 
What a fun way to look at the inevitable. The use of an acrostic, not to exactly lyricize a special moment in time, but the format, the rhythm and cadence of the writing is light, energetic and a delight to read.
 
  THEME
 
The New Year has a place with us each year. Whether invited to the table and a feast or a party and a celebration the "baby year" comes along with a bit of noise, some special promises that sound like accolades and maybe should be welcomed with a lot more energy than what our hearts can conceive.

Tied to the New Year's appearance is some beautiful prose aligned with the words "The Promise." Like the first words "Oath of New Year," the promise speaks of the joy of trust, vows, and promises where love can begin to flourish.

  STRUCTURE
 
The prose is written in an acrostic format to the words: "Oath of New Year" and "The Promise." The format adds a great deal of joy to what might be taken as ordinary, or mundane. After all promises, and oaths, and New Years happen all the time, right? But the author has given us a special way to reflect on the ways our story may play out this year! Beautifully.
 
  MY FAVORITE MOMENT
 
This was my favorite moment:

“Promise that will carry us through this chaotic unfeeling world of turmoil
Remember that side by side we shall get through the darkest moments
Only you and I, alone can depend on each other, never forget that the
Most important thing we can do is love and cherish each other ”

How blessed we are when we can share with our most cherished love the joys of a New Year and days yet to be experienced together. The treasure is in the wisdom of young hearts that know that love will overcome every obstacle, no matter what is hiding in the shadowy months of the year ahead.
 
  SUGGESTIONS
 
I liked everything written in this piece. I think it is super just the way you have created it.

  IN SUMMARY
 
"Invalid Item"  begins by giving the New Year something to say at his own celebration and ends with beautiful words of promised love, charity and devotion. I was glad to be a part of this special time of celebrating the New Year.
 
I hope my thoughts and impressions have been a help. Let me know if you have any questions about my review.
 
Kind Regards,

~Kenword~ 
 




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