My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.
THE STORY
Galahad lives on the street and sticks his nose in business that isn't his.
WHAT I LIKED
I liked the friendship between Glad and Alberto. The title was appropriate to the story. The story takes inspiration from the quotation inspiration but the quote isn't used in the story.
POV NARRATION/TENSE
This is told in the third person limited by Galahad. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.
DIALOGUE
There's a good blend of dialogue and narration.
DESCRIPTIONS
There's enough to set the scenes.
SETTING
TIME: modern day?
PLACE: the streets
This is something that is not defined but could be clarified for the reader.
CHARACTERS
Galahad
Galahad really does have a good heart, but he doesn't have a good track record of making good choices.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.
PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS
Suggestions as mentioned above. The opening engages the reader. A realistic look at life on the streets. Word count was listed in accordance with the rules. Good luck in the contest.
You responded to this review 04/04/2023 @ 7:24am EDT
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