My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.
THE STORY
Taking a philosophical angle, Karen, a scientist, struggles with faith.
WHAT I LIKED
I thought this was a good character study in regards to faith. The quotation inspiration fit the story.
POV NARRATION/TENSE
This is told in the third person limited by Karen. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.
DIALOGUE
There's a good blend of dialogue and narration. Dialogue tags are used appropriately.
DESCRIPTIONS
There's enough to set the scenes.
SETTING
TIME: modern day
PLACE: clinical setting
This is something that is clarified for the reader.
CHARACTERS
Karen
There's enough here to understand her motivations. She is torn between believing in God or not.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML to tell the story.
PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS
The opening intrigues the reader. The ending is hopeful. A solid psychological study. Word count was listed in accordance with the rules. Good luck in the contest.
You responded to this review 04/05/2023 @ 12:34am EDT
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