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Quotation Inspiration: Official Contest  (ASR) Use the quote provided to write a story and win big prizes! #1207944 by Writing.Com Support

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My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

THE STORY

Elena reaches out to an old boyfriend, Max, regarding a supernatural problem. Is he willing to believe?

WHAT I LIKED

I liked the imagination of the story. The quotation inspiration is apparent in the story.

POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the first person by Max. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.

DIALOGUE

There's a good blend of dialogue and narration. Good use of dialogue tags.

DESCRIPTIONS

There's enough to set the scenes.

SETTING

TIME: modern day
PLACE: urban setting

This is something that is clarified for the reader.

CHARACTERS

Max

There's enough here to understand his motivations. He's a nice guy and wants to help, but has to go outside of his comfort zone.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The story feels a tad rushed, (probably due to the word count limitation) and I would suggest starting a later point in the story, or perhaps taking more time with the incubus reveal and less time on the ending. The opening engages the reader. I liked the hopeful ending of the story. Word count was listed in accordance with the rules. Good luck in the contest.