Hello Joy !

Your poem was featured in my "read & review" area today at Writing.Com. I enjoyed it so I decided to give you a review. I hope you find it encouraging and uplifting.


INITIAL IMPRESSION / OVERVIEW:

You wrote a lovely spring homecoming senryu poem that I enjoyed reading.

You engaged my interest well and kept me reading to the very end (granted, this isn't hard with a very short poem but some people manage to lose me on the first line!).


MORE DETAILED FEEDBACK:

I love daffodils and the photo you chose for your thumbnail picture for this poem.

I loved the connection of spring and homecoming.

As a veteran, this poem of yours was extra special to me.

I appreciated that you stuck with the traditional five seven five syllable count form for your senryu form poem.

I didn't notice any spelling or grammatical mistakes (or mistakes of any kind) in your poem.



IDEAS TO MAKE YOUR PIECE STRONGER:
In the spirit of helpfulness, I'd love to have some suggestions for improvement, but I think it's perfectly lovely as it is. Well done!






CONCLUSION:

I wish you every success with this and future poems.

You wrote a fun spring homecoming that I enjoyed reading. Well done!

Thank you for sharing your writing with the Writing.Com community!


May love, joy and peace be yours in abundance!
PWheeler




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