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A Review From The Iron Bank Of Braavos

Hi Jody, I am Megan, one of the sly foxes.

Title: Ghost Hunting

First Impression: I saw that this was about ghosts so I had to read this. I worked in an old county building that was haunted with ghosts and I had encounters so I can relate. I had to read this and I knew it would peak my interest. I couldn't wait to get started. The house stands quietly as it has for years now. It is over a hundred years old and no one has lived there in over a decade. These lines gave me the chills and I knew I was ready for this story. I started reading.

What needs your attention: The ghosts communicated with apps on a machine. Maybe if she saw a real ghost would have been interesting. This is spooky also. The message comes out clear and the ghosts get their message across.

What part I liked best: The descriptions and the beginning. It giver you chills. Messages on the machine. You feel anxious for the character and like I said, there were ghosts where I worked at. This draws me in. I like any ghost stories and I read them and watch them on TV.

Overall Impression: Looks like you spent time with this. These ghosts are well rounded characters and are smart enough to send messages on an app on a machine. Creative and a good style. This holds the reader's interest. The person not wanting to join the track team and driving down the road where the ghost house was. I get that. A well written story.

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