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| Disclaimer: The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise. Greetings staiNed   !I am currently reviewing as part of the tasks set by the "Game of Thrones"  . I especially visited your port to dig your most precious gems then this piece appeared. In this review, I mainly focus on the positives of your piece and I may point some Areas for Improvement if found any. Without much a do, here are the things I noticed after delving deeper into the contents:Honest Vulnerability This short poem cuts straight to the heart of a deeply relatable experience – the act of masking pain with false happiness. The opening line, "I don't dream of what could be," establishes the speaker's resigned perspective. They have lost a sense of hope or optimism, making the 'fake happiness' that follows all the more poignant. Deceptively Simple Yet Effective The poem's power lies in its simplicity. Using everyday words, it depicts a complex emotional struggle. The phrases "twinkling eyes rimmed with tears" and "happiness I fake" paint a vivid picture of someone desperately trying to maintain a facade of normalcy while crumbling within. Conciseness as Impact Sometimes, the things we leave unsaid are the most powerful. The poem focuses on describing the act of faking happiness rather than deeply exploring why the speaker feels this way. This brevity leaves the reader with a lingering sense of unease, a reflection of the speaker's own unresolved pain. The Power of Relatability While the poem's theme is tinged with sadness, its core honesty is what makes it resonate. Most people have, at some point, put on a brave face to hide vulnerability. This poem validates those feelings, offering a sense of unspoken understanding that can be oddly comforting. A Note on Potential for the Future As a reviewer, I'd also add that this poem shows promise. The writer could further develop their voice by exploring the reasons behind the forced happiness, adding more sensory details, or experimenting with poetic techniques like metaphors or imagery. These layers might add depth and further enhance the impact. Overall, this is a beautiful poem. I enjoyed reading this. Thank you for sharing. Write on! Best regards, Gervic   My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 04/06/2024 @ 6:23pm EDT