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 | Everywhere  [E] Magic abounds  |
| (4.5)| GAMES OF THRONES STORY REVIEW This is a review for "Everywhere" from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones"  The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.  THE STORYA dragon finds a girl who steals his heart.  WHAT I LIKEDThe story is based off a musical prompt - the music video for "Everywhere" by Fleetwood Mac, and I could definitely see echos of that prompt in the story. For example, I liked the implied darker tonal quality of the story, as it matched the video. The girl in the video longs to be with her loved one, and the dragon curious, once curiosity is sated realizes the same thing. I enjoyed how the author took the inspiration and made the story their own.  POV NARRATION/TENSEThis is told in the first person by the dragon. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately. DIALOGUEI believe there's a word count which limits the storytelling, there is a mix of dialogue narration. The dialogue compliments the narration. DESCRIPTIONSThere's enough to set the scenes. The author uses a good economy of words to paint visuals. For example, "she would run with joyous abandon." SETTINGTIME: medieval times PLACE: fantasy setting, rural and a keep This is something that is clarified for the reader. CHARACTERSDragon & Girl With a tight word count, the reader can tell the girl has a kind heart and the dragon is one full of curiosity.  MECHANICSI did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The story was easy to read. PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONSThe title fits the story, but really comes into play at the ending, bringing the story full circle. The opening engages the reader. This is a story that could defiantly be expanded. Reviewed by StephB for House Targaryen  }
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