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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Greetings from the House of Mormont!
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I hope it’s ok if I review your item, as I have entered the same contest with a story that also centers around music. I’ll readily admit that yours is much better, however. You draw the tensions down into a beautiful resolution that reminds us what music is all about, while painting a picture of the rich symphony soundscape that wraps us into the story.

Very little dialogue is needed here, for you have narrated it well from the perspective of the violinist who has prepared her whole life for this moment. The descriptions use all of our senses to lend emotions to the setting, showing rather than telling as much as possible.

I love cellos and violins, and there are several contemporary “neoclassical” instrumental groups who have both a violin and a cello who work together. Simply Three comes to mind; they’re one of my favorites because they remake pop songs into wondrous melodies that you would never expect. I did my best to envision the wonderful sounds of these instruments in the symphony. It was a pleasure to read this, especially with the satisfying ending. It’s always difficult to describe music in words, and you’ve done well.

A couple of simple typos to fix after the judging is over:
~ The beginning of the season began in this venue repeating a word is not recommended; you can probably delete “the beginning…”
~ let the rich timbre… enveloped the room mismatched tenses.

Thanks for sharing, take care, keep writing and best of luck on the contest *HeartG*

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