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Hi Hope

My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: Somewhere in a forest near you

First Impression: It feels like an epic poem with an end rhyme. The poem's story setting drew the reader into the tale of a lumberjack struggling to get wood for his family stumbles upon the family of Mother, Father, Tommy and Sue.
An Epic is a long narrative poem celebrating the adventures and achievements of a hero. epics deal with the traditions, mythical or historical, which could very well be your magical family.

What needs your attention:
1. In the first stanza chalet and driveway feel like a forced rhyme, it comes down to the reader making the sound work.
2. Tears and fear are close .
3.left and chest.

What part I liked best: I didn't sense this family wasn't real until the end. Nicely done how the secret was disclosed.

Overall impression: The question the reader has why was the rhyming important because the story told was nicely woven and had solid pacing throughout. What distracted this reader was the almost rhymes that really didn't add to the poem.

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What does the Fox say?????


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