Hi, L.A.Saxe ,

I found your short story in the Thriller/suspense genre as part of today's Earn the Badge challenge. And I am glad I did.

This is really a fantastically simple but effective story with a lot of suspense. Very neat to be able to do that in only 300 words. Well done.

You managed to make believable descriptions and a sinister atmosphere with two brothers in the woods. The reader is taken by the hand to walk the path through the woods with them. When the woods began to make noise and move even the reader just wanted to shout: "Run guys, run...I 'll run with you. Let's get out of here." It's that believable.

I felt like the boy-reader in the movie The Neverending Story.

To make a believable and credible suspense story is one of the most difficult things to do, in my experience. You made this happen with the simplest means. But it was a psychologically sound move to set the story at night, near and in the woods, with only their fears to accompany them. It taps into universal feelings of terror and dread.

Thank you for sharing, keep on writing.

WakeUpAndLive


My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .