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 Greetings, Solace.Bring, I am reviewing this today as a judge for the "Writing 4 Kids"  . And you are one of five entries! First of all, my reviews are intended to be helpful and encouraging, not hurtful in any way. Use what you feel works for you, and leave the rest. Followed the prompt & rules First Impression: This is certainly visually appealing with its green font and cute emoticons sprinkled about.  I liked how Felicity longed to fly like Bertrum the Butterfly, and then I thought she wished she could swim like Marvin the Minnow, but he actually helped her realize that her talent was to jump, which she loved doing. A good story-poem about being yourself.   Favorites:She didn’t need wings like a bug or a bee or to sing like a bird in a Sycamore tree or dig in the mud like a burrowing clam. She learned a lesson and shouted out loud, “I’m best being just who I am! I loved the meter, the flow, and the rhyming in this last stanza!  Final thoughts:You have some good imagery here. A few of the lines didn't flow as well as the others, but that's something that can be easily worked out. I'd love to see you add more characters to this! What a fun story. And with more characters, it would make a great picture book. Nice work! Best of luck in the contest! And be sure not to make any changes till after the winners are announced. Thank you for entering!  A Review from: "Positive Hearts Reviews Group" Have a great day and...  K e e p on W r i t i n g ! Cubby ")
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You responded to this review 09/15/2024 @ 3:20pm EDT