Hi Rick,


This is a fantastic story. The tone is tinged with anxiety and anticipation. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if this hum will drastically change communication as a whole eventually. They will read to the last word to find out. In the story, a man finds out about a hum which is said to slow down the speed with which computers do their job, and give people the gift of anticipation again. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The man revealing the remedy speaks like a real person. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.