Hello, Spiritual Dawning, aka purepoetry!


INITIAL IMPRESSION / OVERVIEW:

I enjoyed reading your "The Beauty of Summer" poem today, even though it's winter, it's easy to imagine summertime.

Your writing kept me riveted and I read straight through to the end.



MORE DETAILED FEEDBACK:

Happy Writing.Com Anniversary month! I hope you enjoy this review as a celebration of your time here and find the review uplifting and encouraging.

I found your poem in the "Anniversary Reviews" forum today, reviewed by someone else that I respect. I love summertime, so your title drew me in and I clicked and read your description. I love the Lord too, so decided to then read your poem. Because I enjoyed it a lot, I decided to give you a review as a little anniversary gift. Happiest anniversary wishes to you and best wishes on your writing future too!

I loved the concept behind your "The Beauty of Summer" poem so much. It was full of encouragement, praise for the Lord and enjoyment of His creation and the season of summer.

I thought the four, four-line stanzas and rhyming structure went well with the message of your poem.

My favorite line was the first one. "It is in the beautiful sun you will find joy and answers" because you'd already explained that you were referring to the Lord God as the sun in this poem. God and His Word are who and where I aim to turn to answers the most.

I wondered if this "The Beauty of Summer" poem was written for a particular contest or challenge here, or if it was just written for the joy of writing.

I appreciated the conclusion. I think the Lord is all that we need too, at least in the eternal perspective.

I thought the environment, inspirational, and community genres you selected for this "The Beauty of Summer" poem worked with it.


IDEAS TO MAKE YOUR PIECE STRONGER:

In the spirit of helpfulness, and because of the requirements of a new reviewing challenge I joined recently, I have two little suggestions to make your piece stronger. If you're interested in some constructive criticism, read on. But if you aren't, no worries. Just know that I enjoyed your piece and move on to the next section.

Still reading? You're brave! Yay for you!

I think there is a typo or spelling error in this line / sentence:
"So rise high my firend, be at peace with yourself"
I'm pretty sure you meant "friend" and not "firend," which I don't think is a word, at least in English. So this is really easy to fix, and if you did fix it, your line / sentence would look like this:
"So rise high my friend, be at peace with yourself"

It's always nice for me as a reader to have the form and line count listed below the poem, perhaps in a "notes" section. I don't know how long it took me to start doing that, but once I did, readers responded favorably. So I'd recommend adding that information beneath your poem.

As with any review, please take what serves you and release or ignore what doesn't.


CONCLUSION:

I enjoyed reading your "The Beauty of Summer" poem, and empathized with your sentiments that you expressed in it. It also prompted me to pray for blessings on you and your spiritual journey.

Thank you for sharing your time, creativity, heart, experiences, and writing with the Writing.Com community!

Once again, happy anniversary month! I hope the year ahead is filled with blessings and joy for you!

May love, joy and peace be yours in abundance during your anniversary month, and always!

PWheeler











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