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 Sam Adams on Cloud Nine  Open in new Window. [ASR]
Sam Adams on Cloud Nine for Say It In Eight
by JCosmos Author Icon
Review by Jeff Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: ASR | (3.5)
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Hi JCosmos

I discovered your item on Writing.com via random Read & Review and am sending the following feedback for your consideration.


Positives

I enjoyed this poem. I thought it was short, evocative, and told a story which is not easy to do in so few words. Nicely done!


Suggestions

I found the repetition of the lines ending with "drinking" to be a little repetitive, especially since the second line of the poem already communicates that a "wild night of drinking" occurred, which makes the line about Sam Adams "starting drinking" to feel like a bit of a redundancy.


Overall

Overall, this was an entertaining read. Good work!


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