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A Moment in Time  [E] Josie needs to find something for Emma  |
| (5.0)  HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"   First Impressions: I think the third genre should be ‘Mystery’! That was a very intriguing sentence there near the end, and the readers will forever wonder what the thing was that Josie wanted to tell her daughter. She might have told her – the story ended rather abruptly so it’s possible they had that conversation later, once Emma had finished rummaging though the old boxes, but it seems more likely that Josie parked the issue because she didn’t want to spoil the moment. The story was beautifully written, and I could imagine the scenes, both mother and daughter looking through the boxes and the parents in the old photograph very well. The characters seemed very close and despite the story being very short, I felt they were nice people.  Suggestions: I read the story twice to find out if there was a hint I had missed, but I couldn’t spot it. I think it might be nice to have a bit of a clue what the thing was that Josie wanted to tell her daughter. There were hints that Josie was older and more fragile, but with a daughter who must have been in her early twenties, she couldn’t have been an old woman. That doesn’t mean she couldn’t have an illness though. Or was the secret something to do with the picture, or Emma’s father? Why were they looking for the photo to begin with? So many questions! Perhaps just a sentence that points the readers in the right direction might be good – unless it was there and I missed it, in which case, please tell me   Final Thoughts: It's amazing how a well-placed sentence can turn a story upside down, from a peaceful moment where mother and daughter talk about some memories, to a bit of a mystery that might have all sorts of implications for their relationship. I enjoyed the read!   A Review from: "Invalid Item" This review is affiliated with The B.E.A.R. Fund , a community project that let's you earn exclusive merit badges just by reviewing! My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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