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Naked Ned  [13+] A river trip turns deadly when four friends ignore a warning.  |
| (4.5)| It is my pleasure to read your story, "Naked Ned." Congratulations on your 1st WDC Anniversary!  Reader's Reaction: I love to read horror/scary stories when they give me chills. The beginning paragraph caught my interest, made me wonder about Ned, what was his powers? Why shouldn't anybody call him out? I feel the story moved slowly, but the dialog held my interest. Characters/Dialog: The characters are well-defined. The dialog was well done! Tone/Mood/Atmosphere: The tone was admiring the scenery, yet anxious about certain critters they saw along the way. The mood is bewildered about this Naked Ned person. Drinking while paddling the river was not a good, it made everything look foreboding.  Plot & Pace: The plot revolved around "A river trip turns deadly when four friends ignore a warning." Structure/plot/setting & Imagery: The structure is well don, revolving around a great plot, with great characters, great images as the friends rowed, showing each setting before they saw Ned. Favorite Lines: "As you pass Lily Spring, you may see a man locals call Naked Ned." Taylor read aloud from the crumpled paper the guy at the canoe rental had handed them. "He lives off the river and keeps to himself," She glanced up with mock intrigue and continued, "Please don't approach. Don't call out, wave, or speak to him in any way. Respect his privacy completely. He is not part of the tour. Do not engage. Ned won't bother you if you don't bother him." She finished with an exaggerated gasp. "Spooky." Overall Impression/Conclusion: The beginning paragraph was well done, gaining my interest. All in all, I loved reading your story. I don't know why you only have three stars - Your story was well written. The conclusion was inevitable, but I still held out hopes all will be well. WriteOn!  Thank you for sharing your work with us! Jeannie🌺   My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 04/10/2025 @ 3:23pm EDT