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 | Here We Go Again  [E] Police Dispatcher and a towing company’s name.  |
| (4.5)  My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines. THE STORYThe narrator, a dispatcher, keeps getting in trouble when he gives out the name of the tow truck company.  WHAT I LIKEDThe tow truck with a sense a of humor.  POV NARRATION/TENSEThis is told in the 1st person by the narrator. Past tense is used in the story. DIALOGUENarration drives the story, and dialogue is used in strategic places to make a point. OPENING PARAGRAPHThe opening paragraph interested me enough to keep reading. It has a good, conversational tone of voice that connects well with readers. CHARACTERSI really appreciated the honesty of the narrator. He came across as a credible storyteller. FLOW & PACINGAs a reader, I was right in the moment with the narrator. Well done. MECHANICSI did not notice and spelling/punctuation mistakes. My only suggestion here, and it's minor and a matter of style - maybe increase the font a little to make it easier on the eyes. PARTING THOUGHTSThe title fits the story well. The author uses a good economy of words to tell the story. Nice, light-hearted comedic beats. A Bee Hive Review
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You responded to this review 04/18/2025 @ 9:36am EDT