Hi Purple Catching Up

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Positives

I enjoyed this poem. I thought that the two different purple colors presented on alternating lines, when combined with the informal language ("U" for "you", "2" for "to" or "too", etc.) gave this poem a unique and engaging appearance that stood out from a lot of other poetry.

The overall feel of the piece was reminiscent of a pop/hip-hop song from the late 1990s or early 2000s, with catchy lyrics and a rhythmic beat. I really enjoyed the experience of reading this piece and if your intent was to make it feel like a "Prince" song, I think you accomplished that. Well done!


Suggestions

There were a couple of points where it felt like it was more track listing than poem, because the juxtaposition between the lines didn't really flow. I'm assuming that the prompt you used was to use some Prince song titles in your poem and if that's the case, I think those transitions between song title and line of poetry is where I'm sensing a bit of a rough transition. Although I'm admittedly not a huge Prince fan... or at least not enough of one to definitively pick out the song titles versus the poetry!


Overall

Overall, this was a really fun read and I think you did a good job with it. Nice work!


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Jeff
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