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 Work $#@& Harder? Open in new Window. [18+]
Entry for the rebel poetry contest 5/2025
by Rainy Day Sox Author Icon
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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Greetings, Sox!

I'm here for I Write 2025, and I see we all hopped on the train at nearly the same time *Laugh* I was waiting for someone to come in after Elycia and Sonali collided...

Anyway... Rebel poetry, huh? A chance to let loose what's really on our minds! I went introspective, as usual when I need darker pieces, but I could just as easily have complained about the "work harder" slogan as you and Viv did. I struggle to find work that accommodates my quirks. For me it's more a matter of adaptation, but there are thousands of people who desperately need help getting decent jobs and are trampled underfoot by the system.

Trump promised to "fix" the economy... He's doing something else to it which I shouldn't say but sounds a bit similar. Rather than bringing back jobs, he's eliminating them, while simultaneously causing the prices of everything to increase and cutting all supports out from under people. Have you heard about all the expectant parents who have been fired from the government? So much for being pro-life. Sigh...

Yeah, I think we can all relate to this. I could go on forever complaining about how he's destroying what took centuries to build and will take untold decades to restore. Right now I think everyone on the planet who isn't either a dictator or utterly brainwashed wants to wring his neck, and I don't care who knows I said it.

Your free verse feels almost like a rap, especially considering how rappers always seem to be furious about something. Perhaps some well placed indents would keep the visual flow interesting. I'm only just beginning to use indents in my poetry; in fact, when I prepare to paste it in here, I have to add > at the spots I want to add {indent} to, otherwise I'll forget. Double >> to indicate double indents, which work perfectly to give a stepped effect. Have fun!

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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