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What A Wonderful World Open in new Window. [E]
A grieving woman finds therapy in music.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*PenB* First Impressions:

I wonder if this story was based on personal experience. It certainly read like it was, and anyone who has ever been in that situation will understand - most people have lost a loved one at some point in their lives. This was a poignant tale and I felt myself close to tears a couple of times, even though the tale didn’t overreach for sentimentality. It was a raw and deeply personal look into grief and healing. What made it so powerful were the quiet reflections, small sensory details and honest emotions. The transition from numbness to remembrance and then to acceptance was smooth and believable.


*PenG* Suggestions:

The story was well written and I only noticed a few small errors:

A person does’t know what to say or do.
Just a typo, “doesn’t”.

He would never drive me any where again.
Again, a small typo, “anywhere”.

I couldn’t decide if I want to hold onto these things
The story was written in past tense but here you slipped into present tense - “want” should be “wanted”.

You chose Contest Entry as one of the genres but you didn’t say which contest this was written for. I would suggest putting a link to the contest and the details of the prompt at the end of the entry. Readers won’t judge the tale on the use of the prompt, but it’s always interesting to know what inspired a tale.


*PenP* Final Thoughts:

The story did a wonderful job portraying the early stages of grief - shock, sorrow, numbness, and the glimmer of hope that begins to reappear through memory and music. It was intimate, and the readers felt like they were quietly witnessing a private moment of healing.




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