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 |  | Knowing the Way  [E] Read the scripture repeatedly. God's laws will be in your heart. You'll figure life out.  |
| (5.0)  HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"  Hello, Pumpkin, aka Heartburn! INITIAL IMPRESSION / OVERVIEW:  I enjoyed reading your "Knowing the Way" poem today. Your writing kept me riveted and I read straight through to the end.MORE DETAILED FEEDBACK:  Happy Writing.Com Anniversary month! I hope you enjoy this review as a celebration of your time here and find the review uplifting and encouraging. It is meant to be honest and respectful, and in accordance with WDC guidelines. I found your "Knowing the Way" poem in your port today. After wishing you a happy anniversary in your notebook, I poked around a little until this poem's title caught my eye. The description intrigued me so I clicked and read your whole poem and enjoyed it. So I decided to give you a review. Happiest anniversary wishes to you and best wishes on your writing future and walk with the Lord God too! I loved the Bible verse that your poem is based on long before even joining writing.com. It's a great one to select to write about. I thought you did a great job not only with the poem, but also with integrating the verse into it. I liked how you made the Bible verse part of the poem stand out in bold purple font. I use purple to signify spiritual things like Bible verses in my writing too. Time spent in God's Word is indeed precious and always profitable, at least in an eternal scope. Memorizing it helps us greatly. I believe God brings certain verses to mind when we most need them. It helps to have them in our minds already. My favorite line (aside from the Bible verse) was the "How precious is time spent in your Word." line.  Lovely and true! Your love for and dedication to the Lord God shined throughout your poem. I thought that was beautiful and it caused me to pray for the Lord to bless you, guide you, and encourage you. I didn't notice any spelling or grammatical mistakes (or mistakes of any kind) in your "Knowing the Way" poem. I was glad you mentioned the contest for which you wrote this poem. I wondered if you'd placed in it, and then thought to check the awardicons, and sure enough, you did! ""Knowing the Way" 3rd Place Winner "The Lighthouse Poetry Contest" January 2021" Congratulations! I thought the religious, experience, and contest entry genres you selected for this poem were appropriate matches for it. I liked that you included your poetry form and line count along with the prompt below your poem.IDEAS TO MAKE YOUR PIECE STRONGER: In the spirit of helpfulness, and because of the requirements of a new reviewing challenge I joined recently, I have one little suggestion to make your piece stronger. If you're interested in some constructive criticism, read on. But if you aren't, no worries. Just know that I enjoyed your piece and move on to the next section. Still reading? You're brave! Yay for you!   The only part of your poem that made me pause was this set of lines"In my missteps, I recall your precepts. Then I delight to do your will, oh my God," The "then" hanging on the end of the first line feels like it doesn't belong there. I understand why you wouldn't put it with the verse which is the second line, but I wonder if you really even need it. I think the poem would actually be better (read smoother) if you deleted the word "then" entirely. If you made this change, they'd look like this (done so you can see and for easy copy and pasting, should you decide to make the change): "In my missteps, I recall your precepts. I delight to do your will, oh my God," Or you could add another line in between, starting with "then." Something like, "Then You work in my heart and" with the sentence being finished by the Bible verse. OTHER THOUGHTS ABOUT YOUR POEM: If you haven't already done so, I encourage you to enter this poem in the Shadows and Light Poetry Contest run by Rachel, aka choconut, username purplesunday. It only takes free verse poetry and I think that your line count is within the limits. It encourages the hosts of contests to have more entries and I think she still needs more to award all prizes, so you'd be helping the other entrants too.As with any review, please take what serves you and release or ignore what doesn't. CONCLUSION:  I enjoyed reading your "Knowing the Way" poem, and empathized with your sentiments that you expressed in it. Thank you for sharing your time, creativity, heart for the Lord, experiences, and writing with the Writing.Com community! Once again, happy anniversary month! I hope the year ahead is filled with blessings and joy for you!May love, joy and peace be yours in abundance, and may the Lord bless you and all that you do, during your anniversary month, and always! PWheeler   A SuperPower Reviewers Choice review!   My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 05/08/2025 @ 6:01pm EDT