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Review #4816297
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 The Song of Seasons Open in new Window. [13+]
Music has powers beyond the grave. (Flash Fiction)
by Robert 'BobCat' Author Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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*PenB* First Impressions:

I’m not sure I completely understood the meaning of this story, but I still found it quite beautiful. The narrator was lying motionless in a graveyard and observed a mysterious man playing a guitar. The music he played seemed deeply connected to nature, mimicking the wind, stirring the earth, and awakening the spirits buried beneath it. It seemed to bring about a supernatural change - phantoms rose, shadows danced, and graves split open - and appeared to trigger a seasonal and spiritual awakening, turning a graveyard from a place of death into a procession of rebirth. That’s what I got from it, anyway, although that doesn’t mean I read it right. What escaped me was what it meant. Just generally the cycle of life and death, or was there some deeper meaning I didn’t get?


*PenG* Suggestions:

The story was well written and I didn’t notice any technical errors. I do have one suggestion though, and it is regarding the sentence structures. You used simple sentences where the same structure became a little repetitive after a while - they all sounded a bit the same. I wasn’t sure if you did this on purpose as it did create a kind of hypnotic rhythm and possibly added to the dreamlike quality of the story. To me, it started to sound a bit monotonous, and I would suggest varying the sentence length and structure to make the narrative more engaging.


*PenP* Final Thoughts:

I read the story a couple of times, partly to see if I could figure out what I had missed, partly because this was just a beautiful read. The imagery was very vivid and I could imagine the scene and the narrator lying on the ground in the middle of it (even though, now that I think about it, I didn’t actually know who he was or what he symbolised). Still, I enjoyed the read a lot, and I’m glad I came across this story!




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