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| (4.5)  HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"  Hi Beholden  .I'm JACE , and I have the honor of reading and reviewing your offering "Seven" . I invite your attention to the comments below. Please bear in mind these notes are from one on the outside looking in; ultimately only you can decide what's right for your story.  Overall Impression. Good morning, and congratulations on achieving your 6th WDC Anniversary today. Thank you for being a part of the WDC community; I hope you stay with us for many years to come.I know you stated some of your best work was hidden away, especially your poetry. My apologies if I pass on those offerings. I saw this item prominently displayed under Highlighted Items, and knowing my penchant for stories over poems, I took the easier path (I hope). I have never been trapped in an elevator in my 70-plus years. And yet, every time I step into one, I have a very fleeting thought of this being the time the unthinkable happens. Not very scientific, I suppose. After all, what are the chances? Actually, I googled it--it's either once every 100,000 rides you might take, OR one in every 100,000 elevators get stuck. Take your pick. Anyone who has ever been in an elevator with a stranger knows the feelings you describe after Erik pushes the appropriate buttons. I felt like I was a fly on the elevator wall watching every trip I'd taken in an elevator. Your dialogue was perfect, moving the story along at the right pace. It didn't feel stilted or rushed. Well done. Great ending. I definitely didn't see that coming. And honestly, I do tend to guess the ending. Easy to see why your offering was nominated for a Quill award. You cited a prompt, which you exceeded with your imagination.  Technical and Editorial Considerations. I normally list those areas that relate specifically to the mechanics of your writing here--punctuation, grammar, spelling, etc. I noted a couple very minor punctuation issues. You have two instances of using an ellipsis. In both cases, there should be a space in front of the ellipsis, which is used to indicate a pause or missing words. After all, you wouldn't have two words without a space. In the second instance, you should actually have a period after the ellipsis since it is used at the end of your sentence. "Maybe we could ...." My Rating. 4.5.  Thank you for sharing this offering. Please accept these comments as offered in friendship and support. They are but my humble opinion.Reviewed by Jace ![A new Anniversary Review signature to use, courtesy of [Link To User legerdemain]](https://www.writing.com/main/images/action/display/ver/1349548281/item_id/1893180.jpg "Anniversary Reviews Image1 [#1893180]
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You responded to this review 05/16/2025 @ 12:07pm EDT