Hi Augus

Congratulations on your account anniversary! I'm sending this review in honor of the occasion.


Positives

You did a great job with the details and description in this piece. There was just enough information to paint a clear picture in the reader's mind, while still leaving enough room for their imagination to fill in the gaps.


Suggestions

From a formatting perspective, you might want to consider employing some paragraph breaks to help structure the piece and make it a little more readable.


Overall

Overall, I thought you did a good job with this piece. Nice work!


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