Hi Jack Johnson of the Lantern

I saw your entry for the contest, and it sparked ideas (which I think was your goal). I needed to write a review for today, so I thought, 'Why not this?' And give a newfound forum fellow something he was not expecting, isn't it fun to log in and find surprises in the inbox?

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This seems like a beautiful and poignant story plot inspired by the emotional journey in "Bubbly," especially if you reimagined a version for an older woman reflecting on her husband.

The plotline of a woman with amnesia rediscovering her love through fragmented memories aligns perfectly with the song's themes of enduring affection and the longing to reconnect with a cherished past. I had numerous ideas about how to expand your concept, which was a bit maddening to narrow down to just the one below. Maybe you will find something in these ramblings to inspire your next banner-winning romance. Lord knows it would be a pleasant departure from all the politics we have in the air these days.

Here's a brief breakdown and some thoughts I had on how you might develop it, keeping it concise yet evocative. I know it may seem a bit formulaic, but that's because I am experimenting with a new plotting checklist to help me organize my stories. So I ask your patience as I skip along, twisting your idea and forcing it into my checklist.

Opening Scene: A woman is discovered unconscious in a river, with no identification or memory. A kind stranger—perhaps a fisherman or a small-town doctor—nurses her back to health, naming her something temporary like "River" due to her mysterious arrival. –

Memory Awakening: After nearly a year, snippets of her past emerge—faint images of laughter, a warm hand, a familiar voice. The pivotal memory of being married ignites her resolve. This could be triggered by a song, a photograph, or a scent reminiscent of her husband. –

Departure: Grateful to her caretaker, she sets out, armed with only her growing recollections. The stranger might give her a small keepsake (e.g., a locket or map) to aid her journey, symbolizing their bond. –

Journey of Remembrance: As she travels, each memory—dancing in the rain, a shared meal, a quiet evening by the fire—deepens her determination. These moments mirror the reimagined "Bubbly" lyrics, as her heart warms and her scars soften as she pieces together her life with her husband. –

Climax and Resolution: She reaches her hometown, perhaps finding her husband's grave or an elderly relative who reveals he's passed. The story could end with her finding peace in their shared history, carrying his love forward, or a twist where he's alive but changed, testing her rediscovered bond.

Development Ideas – Tone: Lean into the bittersweet nostalgia of the reimagined song. Use sensory details—such as rain on a window or the creak of an old house—to evoke her memories.

Character Growth: Her amnesia initially renders her dependent, but with each recovered memory, her independence and resolve strengthen, reflecting the song's theme of enduring love as a source of strength. –

Conflict: Add obstacles like a flooded river blocking her path or a past she's hesitant to fully uncover (e.g., a strained marriage before the amnesia), adding depth to her journey. –

Ending Options: A quiet, reflective close (visiting his grave with a photo album) could mirror the song's tender outro, or a hopeful reunion could tie back to the original's optimism, depending on your intent. This plot has rich potential for emotional resonance, blending mystery, love, and self-discovery. If you'd like, I can help expand a specific scene, suggest dialogue, or even create a chart to map her memory timeline. What do you think—any part you'd like to dive into further?


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