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The Luster of Loneliness  [E] A letter to the lonely, and a summons to the Soldiers of Solitude.  |
| (4.0)| Xenos, This is quite the treatise on loneliness and spirituality. You draw the reader from what is into what very well could be. Although the emphasis on a Creator is biased, that fits this piece. This is not exactly an article, as I read it; rather it is more of an op-ed, or even a persuasive piece. I can't say I agree with your text, but I very much appreciate the way you've worded it. "Asking God for the meaning of life is like the Mona Lisa asking Da Vinci for the meaning of her canvas." Yes! That such an apt analogy! And I say the answer DaVinci would give is: So that I might create you for my own reasons, not yours. Well, not to be too argumentative, but that's a bit selfish, and not something I am drawn to for guidance and worship. Why do I slip that little jab in? To demonstrate that your essay has gotten my attention and made me think. It has encouraged me to ponder my own feelings and beliefs, contrast them against your postulations, and reevaluate—or not—where I stand. You have made me think, and I am wont to tell people in my reviews how important that is in writing. Don't complain; explain. From a point of criticism, there's not much I have to offer—just three things, really. ~ Consider using a larger font. I recommend 3.5 or 4. I'm not exactly old yet...but my eyes aren't the best anymore, and reading the small print was a bit laborious. ~ Trim. Trim, trim, trim. In this reader's opinion, 2/3 of this could be culled without sacrificing your point and its support. I suggest you try to be more concise. My attention started top flag a couple of times, but maybe that's because of the 10-second-attention-span world in which we live. Still, sometimes brevity is a strength. ~ Be careful using phrases like "Soldiers of Solitude." It evokes the feeling of fantasy genres, and it can undermine the sincerity and reality of your work. Overall, this was a vbery thoughtful and impressive piece of writing, Xenos. Well done. This review offered by Jeffrey ——————————   "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group"  Please note that my reviews are intended to be respectful and encouraging. If you feel I have been rude, cruel, or otherwise inappropriate, please report this review to a moderator.
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You responded to this review 07/11/2025 @ 10:29pm EDT