Greetings WriterRick .

I am reviewing your story today for the official contest, "What a Character! : Official WDC Contest"  [E]. Thank you for entering the contest and making the attempt at the character presented by the prompt.

Overall: We do get a nice character focused story where one achievement leads to questions and concerns over where to go next with a little bit of a common ending approach with the sort of meta attempt in bringing the story and title into the piece towards the end. Different people will enjoy the read for the item and some might take a particular interest from the tech element brought in the beginning.

Prompt: You do well with the use of the prompt because we get from the very beginning the character reaching a big goal that they have been working on for a certain period of time. This fits the prompt because it was required to have a main character reach a life long goal and to see what might happen next. Not every story put that aspect at the very beginning, but you did find a way to make the big goal the start and not the main focal point of the story but with the character having to figure things out from there. Nice work with the use of the prompt.

Story: I do really like the approach you took with the prompt usage in this particular piece. The fact she was doing an app that would bring communication possibilities through the speech technology to others is a great idea and something that helps give representation that isn't always available in fiction stories. You make the character believable with her big moment and the struggles that might at times seem mundane cause what really does one do after a big accomplishment. I will admit that it loses steam a little for me as the reader when we get to the end with the whole, moving to writing using the title of this story within it. Having been on WDC for 20 years and having judged official contest rounds for many of those years, it is just something we have seen done a number of times. It might not be something you have seen a lot but yes, it's a little done and not the only entry with that usage this month. Not that it's bad, but that it doesn't pack as strong of a punch compared to some other elements.

So, nice work on character. Not a very top one for me but there were two other judges and trust me, we differ in opinions so that doesn't mean it wasn't near the very top for someone else.


Other Notes: On the technical side you do fairly well. I only have a couple of notes but they are minor details that are nice to have but not something that is required.

Not something that counts against the story but something you might consider is to adjust the font size for the item when entering contests. I'm trying to remember to do it for all of my items, even the private ones because it helps for my own eyes to have the bigger font than the standard when reading the items here online. I recommend to use either 3.5 or 5 to make it easier to others to read.

It would also be nice, along with the word count, to have the prompt at the bottom of the story. You could even link the contest or write the name. This can be put into a dropnote if you want the focus to be on the words of the story. it just helps to provide the information to the reader what might have inspired the story. Not required other than the word count but it does help.

Nice work. Keep writing.






My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .