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 | The Way You Stay  [E] a poem from someone special to me  |
| (5.0)  HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"  Hello, CHAN, aka lectiophile27! INITIAL IMPRESSION / OVERVIEW:  I enjoyed reading your "The way you Stay" poem today. Your writing kept me riveted and I read straight through to the end.MORE DETAILED FEEDBACK:  Welcome to Writing.Com! I found this "The way you Stay" poem of yours in my "Read & Review" section. I clicked and was intriqued, then I read your poem and enjoyed it, so I decided to give you a review. I hope you enjoy this review as a celebration of your joining our community here and find the review uplifting and encouraging. It is meant to be honest and respectful, and in accordance with Writing.Com guidelines. I loved your poem so much. It was full loving thoughts and feelings, and I found it beautiful and romantic to read. I thought the free verse form worked well with the message of your poem. My favorite stanza was the last one, although I enjoyed your entire poem. I imagine the person you wrote this for will love it. I personally would love to receive such a thing from my beloved. I wondered if you wrote this poem spontaneously, or if it was for some assignment, challenge, or contest here or elsewhere. If you haven't already done so, I encourage you to enter this poem in the Shadows and Light Poetry Contest run by Rachel, aka choconut, username purplesunday. It only takes free verse poetry and I think your line count is within the limits. It encourages the hosts of contests to have more entries and I think she still needs more to award all prizes. The closing for this round might be in a few days, but a new one will start shortly thereafter. I thought the romance / love genre you selected for this poem was a perfectly appropriate match for it. My very favorite part of your "Testimonies" blog post is that your love for the person you wrote about shined throughout it.IDEAS TO MAKE YOUR PIECE STRONGER: In the spirit of helpfulness, and because of the requirements of a new reviewing challenge I joined recently, I have some little suggestions to make your piece stronger. If you're interested in some constructive criticism, read on. But if you aren't, no worries. Just know that I enjoyed your piece and move on to the next section. Still reading? You're brave! Yay for you!   This is a really nit-picky suggestion, but I'd recommend changing the title of your poem to title case. Right now it looks like this:"The way you Stay" If you made this change, it would look like this (done so you can see and for easy copy and pasting, should you decide to make the change): "The Way You Stay" I believe this is the standard way to do titles, so that's why I recommend this change. You may not know this, but we are allowed three genres, and people do search by genre here. Perhaps "relationship," "inspirational," "personal," or "experience” might be nice options to consider? There's a drop down list, as you know, because you had to use it to select “romance / love". I don't have the list memorized; those are just some suggestions. The actual list will probably be more helpful. Just to show it's not only me who recommends this, moderator Schnujo passed! WHEW!  shared on the news feed in a comment on 2/21/2025 that “SM has told me, himself, that the #1 way people search for things to read on WdC is through the genre search, so if you aren't filling out all 3 genres, you are literally missing out on readers.” [On the chance that you don't already know this, SM is our StoryMaster here, and definitely in the know.] If you want to see the note and scroll down to see her whole comment, here’s the link: "Note: View this Note". It's always nice for me as a reader to have the poetry form and line count listed below the poem, perhaps in a "notes" section. I don't know how long it took me to start doing that, but once I did, readers responded favorably. So I'd recommend adding that information beneath your poem. It might help you get more future readers if you added a thumbnail picture to your poem, if your membership level allows that. Pictures are attention getting and could help your poem stand out in a list of search results. I think a picture of snowflakes or anything with snow in general would be especially nice.As with any review, please take what serves you and release or ignore what doesn't. CONCLUSION:  I enjoyed reading your "The way you Stay" poem tonight, and empathized with your sentiments that you expressed in it. Thank you for sharing your time, creativity, heart, experiences, and writing with the Writing.Com community! Once again, welcome to Writing.Com! I hope you enjoy our community here, and also hope that the year ahead is filled with blessings and joy for you!May love, joy and peace be yours in abundance! PWheeler   A SuperPower Reviewers Choice review!   My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 07/12/2025 @ 3:43am EDT