Hello Alanlee

Hi, and welcome to Writing.Com! I found your story in the Read and Review section.

My First Impression:

Your story caught my eye, and I admit to being curious as I read. I did not expect the way the story to turn out.

My Favorite Part:

I liked the detail that you put into describing the scene inside the box. I also liked the tongue-in-cheek ending. I hate magic, especially magic boxes. In his place, I would hate it as well.

My Suggestions/Final Thoughts:

Just a couple of suggestions...take them for what they are worth

The last line of the first paragraph: Can't this be possible? Perhaps try Can this be possible, or This can't be possible!

6 lines from the ending: "We'll have an early trash collection... Perhaps try We have an early trash collection...

Thank you for sharing your work. I look forward to reading more of your work in the future.