Hello, Haunted Sox

Here is a review for your "Yip!" .

Comments and Observations:

Oh, such fun! This story is punchy, humorous, and builds neatly, all the way to its ending.

The humor here is mostly dialogue-driven. The husband's mischief bounces off the narrator's restraint, exasperated though it may be.

The comic twist here is the husband's "pepper-spraying" the lawn, absurd as it is. And his version of the neighbor's dog's reaction, "He sniffed twice and returned home with his tail between his legs alternately running and rubbing at his nose." This is as if he were talking about a personal rival of some sort.

The closing is very relatable and with a punch, too. “I’m sorry about my husband brownies” made me laugh. It ties up the story so perfectly!

What is so special about this story is the narrator's presence with a cynical reaction. It works so well, especially for a story this size.

Overall, I thought this story to be a charming, funny, and light piece. It shines as it is.

Suggestions on the text as to grammar, usage, and punctuation

I could see no problems in this area.

Best wishes with your work.




My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .