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By the Book Open in new Window. [13+]
Sophia is planning to get married but something is terribly wrong.
by Write-fully Loti Author Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Greetings, Loti!

This was an exciting story, sharing the experience of a young college student as her fiance becomes enraptured by a creepy book, far more powerful than anything we could imagine. I waited breathlessly to see if she could rescue Allen. The ending was worth it.

I would recommend you add a third genre to the item, more relevant to the eeriness of the subject at hand, such as Paranormal, Supernatural, Gothic, or something similar. I also feel as though something is lacking in your writing style... I hate trying to say this to people because it's so subjective, and I feel inadequate to explain the instinctive feeling. But somehow, it felt as if your characters were not really alive, as if they were all speaking their parts like a stage play. I can't even begin to suggest what I might change about this... It's just a silly feeling of mine. Please don't take it to heart.

You have good skills of description, giving us the spring scenery contrasting with the mysterious events, and there's enough mention of physical emotional responses such as chills and panic. It's definitely a fun read, albeit maybe somewhat trite and even perhaps predictable. But a good story to read after dark, for sure.

Take care, thanks for sharing and keep writing *HeartO*
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