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Through Stranger Pass Open in new Window. [E]
A foggy road holds many secrets of the mind.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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I find this to be an especially appealing poem, full of mysterious atmosphere and old-fashioned quaintness. It feels like the poetry of yore, perhaps from Sir Walter Scott in one of his novels. You've painted a picture of personified fog, beckoning with phantom scenes of imagination and adventure. I've learned a new word: "destrier:" a medieval battle horse. Though perhaps, if we were to split hairs over it, a destrier is solely for war purposes and would not be used in the fox hunts, unless the image has already shifted between the two couplets.

Your flow is smooth and free, with an engaging structure that makes me want to write it down by hand and memorize it, as I used to do with poetry that caught my fancy when I was a kid. I remember memorizing several poems of this sort, likely written by Walter Scott... Are you familiar with the one about Allen A Dale? (That name looks so funny...) https://www.poetrynook.com/poem/allen-dale

I always suggest Size 4 Verdana font to ensure your item takes its best place on the page, especially because an item this long can tend to come across as rather tedious (purely visually speaking) if it's left at default size. I could quote an old friend who complains about "used car contracts..." You can glance at my own poetry or my blog for examples. This review is in 3.5 Verdana. Oh, do add a cover art of some kind, it'll add so much to the item and look more professional in your portfolio. One of the old-school Wombo Dream AI styles would be perfect...

You should submit this for publication; I have no idea if there's a market for classical poetry, but there must be. Also, you should enter it over at "Poetic Traditions Poetry Contest " Open in new Window., Bren would love it. I think it's lovely, mystical and charming.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *WingL**Heartv**WingR*


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