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A Rainbow of Colors Open in new Window. [E]
It was her twenty first birthday, a surprise was a hot air balloon ride and a ring.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Oh my, what a shock this one was. So much happiness and beauty, blown away in two sentences at the end *Cry* The foreshadowing with the little girl drawing the angels was haunting.

I would recommend changing the rating from E, as not only does it end with death but it includes some minor "naughtiness" between the lovers. 13+ or 18+ would be more appropriate.

You painted clear word pictures, showing us the glow of emotion and the dearness of the relationship before so abruptly taking it away from us. The final image is vivid, leaving us wondering about the fickleness of fate and sudden, meaningless tragedies. It reminds me a bit of the old story The Bridge of San Luis Rey, where we spend the whole thing getting to know a bunch of people who all end up flying off the end of a broken bridge just at the major turning points of their lives *Pthb*

I might suggest considering a different title, as technically a "rainbow of colors" is redundant. The meaning is only revealed at the end. I think the word "confetti" would lend more depth of significance to the title and ending sentence, as confetti is made of shreds and fragments of former beauty that quickly get discarded.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *WingL**Heartv**WingR*


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