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 Fantasy Lies in the Mind Open in new Window. [13+]
A game my friend Nikki and I played when we were little girls...
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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I love the fun and imagination described here, as we take a peek into your world of classic make-believe adventures as a youngster. Even when the other kids don't necessarily "play along" or even the narrator loses interest too quickly, it becomes a precious memory of the experience of childhood. The free verse is conversational and easy to read, with slant rhymes that give it a rap-like flow. I also like the play on words in the title: "fantasy lies..." Our minds create the most beautiful lies sometimes... *Think*

I would recommend giving this a nice cover art image, perhaps from one of the stock collection WdC offers. It might also be a good idea to center the poem on the page, and for that matter I always recommend a larger font size to give it a fresh and engaging appearance. Another point might be to offset the footnote in a {dropnote:"LinkTextHere"}{/dropnote} to keep it tidy at the bottom.

This was a nice read; it reminded me of my own childhood make-believe universes, where I used my stuffed animals to play out scenarios inspired by my favorite books.

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