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 In One Open in new Window. [E]
What lies inside...
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I popped into your port to do an Anniversary review and picked this poem because of the unique title - "In One."

There's a lot of diverse emotions in someone - and this poem seems to highlight the emotional ups and downs. The poem starts with shadow of darkness growing - that struggle, that questioning of spirit, ending on a determination that there is only dark confusion. I thought the poem was an introspective journey into the shadows of the darkness of the soul.

This is a free form poem with no apparent rythme scheme. I did not spot any spelling mistakes, and there was minimal punctuation.

I thought this description was interesting:
Interesting, and imaginations
grapple such embrace of degradation

I think when we're feeling down it's easy to grapple with degradation.

My suggestion would be to structure the poem a bit more into stanzas and perhaps use a bit more punctuation. It would help establish a flow and rhythm to the poem, though if you were going for a stream of thought consciousness it works.

An introspective look at the shadows in our emotions.

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