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 Splendid Sun Open in new Window. [E]
Rays of hope for the new year.
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I popped into your port and the title of your poem intrigued me. There's so many things you can do with the image of the sun.

The poem opens up in the heart of winter. Sometimes, you can go days without seeing the sun, but here in this poem, it peeks out to start off the New Year offering hope and good vibes to a fresh start.

This is a free form poem without an apparent rythme scheme. I did not spot any spelling or punctuation mistakes.

I especially liked:
Splendid sun
Peeks out from under clouds
Likened to an awakening.

This is the opening of the poem and it drew me right in. The sun here, represents hope and and light. Nice use of the word "awakening." The poem starts off on an upbeat note in the middle of overcast winter.

The poem has a nice flow when read out loud.

My suggestion, and this is tough, because I really like the poem as is, maybe paint more of an overcast winter so the sun pops that much more when introduced.

A positive, upbeat poem that invites the reader to see the heart of winter in a hopeful light.

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