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 Inseparable Open in new Window. [E]
The love I one and I are inseparable in more ways than one
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I popped in to do an anniversary review and the title lured me in.

The poem was about going through the seasons of life with a loved one and realizing the bond is inseparable.

The poem is free form with rythmes, but no set rythme scheme.

I enjoyed the progression of the poem through the seasons until the end when the poem comes up with its inevitable conclusion. I did not spot any spelling mistakes.

I especially liked:
And unchained like a melody
A symphony of hearts, yet tied together
Like a threefold cord, not easily untethered

Nice word play to evoke music and tie it into a symphony of hearts, tugging on the heartstrings of love.
My suggestion would be to use punctuation to help establish a beat and a rythme when reading the poem out loud.

Nice expression!

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