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 Tears And Raindrops Open in new Window. [E]
A poem of difference of tears and raindrops
by plainsue Author Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Always intrigued when it comes to rain in poetry, so I decided to pop in.

The contrasted teardrops and rain and the end put them together. I especially liked the opening alliteration and use of repetitive consonant sounds to simulate the rain/tears falling and put the reader right in the poem with the poet.

This is a free form poem with no apparent rythme scheme.

I especially liked:
Weeping howling
noise of sadness
listen with wholeness
This stanza put me in the heart of the emotions, heaving, sighing, sad, trying to reign in the fury of the storm inside me.

My suggestion, and this is hard because I like the poem as is, is to flesh it out a bit more. Add a couple more stanzas depicting the ebbs and flows of a rain storm. Add a little thunder and lightning and really amp up the emotions.

Overall, nice word play leads to a stiring emotional read.

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