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The Thrill of the Chase Open in new Window. [E]
A man allows for a balance of power between himself and nature
by Jeffrey Meyer Author Icon
Review by SpookyBee Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE STORY

A Safari hunter might be late for work today.

*Smile*WHAT I LIKED

The story uses the prompt in a creative and entertaining way, taking the reader to the savannahs of Africa.

*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the 3rd person limited from Keller's perspective. Past tense is used in the story.

*Star*DIALOGUE

The dialogue accents the narration. Dialogue tags are used appropriately.

*Star*OPENING PARAGRAPH

The opening paragraph sets paints the setting of the story - on the range in Africa hunting big game. It does a good job putting the reader in the moment. The paragraph was dynamic and intrigued me enough to keep reading.


*Star*CHARACTERS

Keller is a serious minded guy who loves to hunt big game. His assistant, Farley, does what a good assistant does and tries to keep his boss on time. How the reader feels about Keller is open to their own interpretation. I'm not a believer in hunting big game, so I found a moral lacking character, but some might find an adventurer or even someone to be admired.


*Star*FLOW & PACING

The opening set the scene, the middle set on a path forward and the end put Keller's plan in action. Well done.

*Star*MECHANICS

I did not notice and spelling/punctuation mistakes. My only suggestion here, and it's minor is check is check "jibed" and make sure it doesn't need capitalization.

*Star*PARTING THOUGHTS

The title fits the story well and hints at the theme in the story. The author uses a good economy of words to tell the story. Well done!

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