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 | The Dilemma  [E] Inspired by a middle school reading lesson  |
| (5.0)  "Anniversary Reviews" is celebrating A QUARTER CENTURY of Writing.Com! Hi thea marie . Only a few short weeks until your 22nd Writing.Com Anniversary. That's a remarkable milestone.I'm Ja-Ja-JINX , and I have the honor of reading and reviewing your offering "The Dilemma" . This review comes to you as part of a special edition of "Anniversary Reviews" , which allows me to review an item from any member who joined WDC within the first five years of the site's existence. I chose October dates as I would be traveling out of the country for half the month. Thank you for supporting the site in those early years.I invite your attention to the comments below. Please bear in mind these notes are from one on the outside looking in; ultimately only you can decide what's right for your story.  Overall Impression. Peer pressure--some of the strongest pressure a person, especially a youngster, will ever have to face. Each of us wants to believe he or she will pass the test. Many times it's an older peer exerting pressure on a younger person. As I was growing it, the opposite was true. My two-year-younger brother was the budding thief and always trying to take me along on his forays. The first time it happened, I was weak and gave in. While only a snack cake, I felt ashamed and drained. I never gave in again; I also never turned him in. He was eventually caught on his own, a lesson that was both difficult and lasting for us both. Your story pacing was spot on, carried forward with good use of dialogue. You said the story was inspired by a middle school lesson indicating this was fiction. However, it was easy to believe the events actually happened. Using names for the various stores and other descriptions personalized the tale, and made it more real. That these lessons are passed down successfully are a testament to being raised right. I believe my own children learned these lessons well, too.  Technical and Editorial Considerations. In this section I normally list those areas that relate specifically to the mechanics of your writing--punctuation, grammar, spelling, etc.I found no issues with the technical aspects of your writing. Well done. Great title!  My Rating. 5.0.  Thank you for sharing this offering. Please accept these comments as offered in friendship and support. They are but my humble opinion.
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