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Palindrome poem #87
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I popped into your port for an anniversary review and was intrigued by the description of the poem - a palindrome.

This poem is about the relationship between a father and son throughout life. The palindrome involves the second stanza and how it mirrors the first.

I thought this was poem was amazing in how it captured a young son/boy/teenager's thoughts about his parents and how his father think they are losing them, and then to flip that, as the son is now older and it's the parent who becomes lost with Alzheimers.

I especially liked:
"Slipping away slipping
day by day"

The wording is simple with refrain like qualities that demonstrate how slowly a parent loses a son during the teenage years and how slowly an adult man loses his older father with Alzheimers.

My only suggestion, and this is minor, to maybe include some punctuation to solidify the beat of the poem.

A Poignant and heartfelt poem. Well done.

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