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Dandelions Open in new Window. [ASR]
Dandelions were only the _first_ thing to disappear...
by Beauregard Vine Author Icon
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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Greetings, Beauregard.

I'm here on a quest to read and review 13+ rated items in the Horror/Scary genre.

This was suitably sinister, beginning in such an innocuous way, one wonders how anybody even noticed the dandelions were missing. It was also sympathetic and relatable, as I live near a large retirement community and could easily picture the elderly, crotchety, yet loveable characters as they played golf and went about their quiet lives.

The opening scene is a little confusing, because at first I assumed the person chomping loudly on shredded wheat must be a kid. You should set up the narrator's identity as quickly as possible in the opening. Also, there seems to be a typo when you write "that was all she wrote: gone. No more dandelions..." It doesn't follow from him watching the TV news announcement.

Also, I can't help picking holes in the concept that all the women and all the children are automatically better than all the men. Superficially, it's easy to think like that, but it doesn't bear real consideration. Many women have flawed characters, and many teenagers are criminals. That's not a very good filtration system.

Otherwise, this is a quietly eerie story, tragic in the simple finality of what's taking place and mysterious in that no one has an explanation for it, spiritual or otherwise. I appreciate the attention to realistic details, the humorous old golf buddies, and the husband's love and sense of duty for his wife.

On a final note, another tiny bit of gallows humor at the end could have been something like "oh well, at least they get diaper duty and not us!" Or something of the sort, a joke about no longer having kids to take care of. Sad, but kinda funny.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *WingL**Heartv**WingR*


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