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 Review #4838613 |
 | Coffee Conclusions  [13+] Flash fiction  |
| (4.0)  My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines. THE STORYRebecca is trying to solve a case and gets a little help from her friend.  WHAT I LIKEDI thought that was one heck of a conclusion to come to in that setting, but it worked! You can solve anything over coffee.  POV NARRATION/TENSEThis is told in the 3rd person omniscient. Past tense is used in the story. DIALOGUEThe dialogue drives the story. Good job with keeping it conversational and easy to understand. OPENING PARAGRAPHThe opening piques the readers interest. Who doesn't want to find out the rest of the story? CHARACTERSRebecca is our busy sleuth, hanging out with her friend and baby. She's likeable but a bit of a busy body. FLOW & PACINGThe opening set up the problem, the ending comes crashing in like a wave. MECHANICSI did not notice and spelling/punctuation mistakes. PARTING THOUGHTSThe title fits the story. The conclusion comes just as quickly as a shot of espresso. An entertaining quickie. An Angel Army Review
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You responded to this review 10/06/2025 @ 3:55pm EDT