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 Review #4838981 |
 | The Best Halloween Costume  [E] A hilarious dialogue about adult trick or treating  |
| (4.0)  My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines. THE STORYThe adults are going Trick-or-Treating but one adult doesn't have the greatest idea for a costume.  WHAT I LIKEDThere were nice comedic elements in the story.  DIALOGUEThe dialogue is the narration. The reader gets the jist of what's happening. OPENING PARAGRAPHThe opening interests the reader to keep reading. I know adults get into Halloween too, so if anything, I might have had them talking about going to an adult party. CHARACTERSAre two adults talking about about going adult trick-or-treating. They're interesting and keep the story amusing. FLOW & PACINGThe opening set up the drama, the middle builds on the drama and end wasn't picture perfect  . MECHANICSI did not notice and spelling/punctuation mistakes. My only suggestion here, and it's minor and a matter of style - maybe increase the font a little to make it easier on the eyes. PARTING THOUGHTSThe title fits the story. My suggestion would be to try and paint the adult's costume with the butt a bit better. I couldn't really visualize it as a reader, that may be a challenge with just dialogue only. BUTT this is a comedy that will make you chuckle. An Angel Army Review
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